'Slap' second outcome

Untitled from Ryan Tailby on Vimeo.

This was the improved version of my 1st piece.
i kept the same staging and changed certain elements around such as the way the 'lap' reveals, for me its a lot smoother and more realistic than my first try and also the 'S' is more smoother and the increase and decrease of the size of it seems more fluent. For me a huge improvement on the first attempt